in your eyes
I caught a glimpse
of an ocean, copper clouds
storm-ravished, heavy swells
hitting hard against weary shores
I think I saw you drowning
let me in
let. me. in.
to your guarded kingdom
we will set sail into the rage
ride waves as tall as troubles
to the brink where waters fall
you are not alone
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Oh Mish, this is absolutely beautiful!
“of an ocean, copper clouds
storm-ravished, heavy swells
hitting hard against weary shores
I think I saw you drowning:
These lines are marvelous….reading the pain in a person’s eyes. And using the storm and sailing metaphor to save a person drowning….whether the drowning be sorrow or fear or despair….this is a wonderful post!
Thank you so much Lillian!
Powerful lines Mish. This hits hard with the image of trying to help a drowning person but being held back. Thanks for hosting.
Thank you, Grace. 🙂
#EyesToGetLostIn
Yes, some truly are. Thanks for reading.
A beautiful poem, Mish, especially the hints of colours in the lines:
‘I caught a glimpse
of an ocean, copper clouds
storm-ravished, heavy swells
hitting hard against weary shores’
and the Bowie-esque ending ‘you are not alone’ (‘Rock ‘n Roll Suicide’) – and Bowie had the most interesting eyes..
Thank you, Kim. Now I must go searching for Bowie’s eyes. It’s been awhile.
I thought Bowie too, but I’d forgotten his eyes. Thanks Kim for reminding me 🙂
‘ride waves as tall as troubles’
That is a good line!
Thanks, Jane 🙂
🙂
I do love how much you can see in a pair of eyes, and the drowning soul is a strong is a strong metaphor for someone lost and in need of help.
Yes, I imagined traveling into a loved one’s eyes as crazy as that seems. Grief hides there.
So well done and I love the sea analogy ❤
Thank you, Lisa! 🙂
You’re welcome 🙂
WOW, this is so utterly beautiful. I am in awe at the depths of your writing. Always. ❤
A very kind comment. Thank you so much! 🙂
Oh Mish, this one is off the chart.
Coming from you sir, I am honored by the comment. Thank you.
From “weary shores” to “the brink” you paint a picture of despair, yet you offer the hope that only care can give.
Thank you, Ken. 🙂
“ride waves as tall as troubles”
Luv this line
Happy Tuesday
Much💝love
Thank you, Gillena.
I can feel the yearning for connection. We all need it. (K)
We do and sometimes we hold back…
Thanks for stopping in. 🙂
It is so interesting the way eyes connect with another’s soul. Very good poem Mish.
Thanks, Dwight.
sounds like a parent trying to protect a child who lost their way … the sea analogy fits. Your words give texture
I like your interpretation, kate.
just what it says to me Mish
Such a wonderful concept that we’re not alone whilst in someone else’s glance.
Yes…even though some do not realize it.
ride waves as tall as troubles
to the brink where waters fall
you are not alone
How so wonderful and reassuring to set forth together with a loved one. Great lines Mish!
Hank
Thank you, Hank. 🙂
Takes my breath away, you read the soul so carefully.
Wow, thank you so much. 🙂
Very welcome:)
Absolutely beautiful Mish.
I appreciate that, Linda. Thank you.
Amazing poetry!
Thank you so much, Mary! 🙂
So powerful!
the play on words and punctuations create such depth and impact.
If each person had a soul determined to reach them like the words in your poem the world would be awakened to love.
I really liked this poem, especially these lines.
“we will set sail into the rage
ride waves as tall as troubles”
Take good care,
Ali