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Olive Eyes

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in your eyes

I caught a glimpse

of an ocean, copper clouds

storm-ravished, heavy swells

hitting hard against weary shores

I think I saw you drowning

 

let me in

let. me. in.

to your guarded kingdom

we will set sail into the rage

ride waves as tall as troubles

to the brink where waters fall

you are not alone

 

 

I am your host for today’s Poetics at

dVerse Poets Pub

The theme is “EYES”. Doors open at 3 p.m. EST.

46 responses »

  1. Oh Mish, this is absolutely beautiful!
    “of an ocean, copper clouds
    storm-ravished, heavy swells
    hitting hard against weary shores
    I think I saw you drowning:
    These lines are marvelous….reading the pain in a person’s eyes. And using the storm and sailing metaphor to save a person drowning….whether the drowning be sorrow or fear or despair….this is a wonderful post!

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  2. Powerful lines Mish. This hits hard with the image of trying to help a drowning person but being held back. Thanks for hosting.

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  3. A beautiful poem, Mish, especially the hints of colours in the lines:
    ‘I caught a glimpse
    of an ocean, copper clouds
    storm-ravished, heavy swells
    hitting hard against weary shores’
    and the Bowie-esque ending ‘you are not alone’ (‘Rock ‘n Roll Suicide’) – and Bowie had the most interesting eyes..

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  4. I thought Bowie too, but I’d forgotten his eyes. Thanks Kim for reminding me 🙂

    ‘ride waves as tall as troubles’

    That is a good line!

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  5. I do love how much you can see in a pair of eyes, and the drowning soul is a strong is a strong metaphor for someone lost and in need of help.

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  6. So well done and I love the sea analogy ❤

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  7. WOW, this is so utterly beautiful. I am in awe at the depths of your writing. Always. ❤

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  8. Glenn A. Buttkus

    Oh Mish, this one is off the chart.

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  9. From “weary shores” to “the brink” you paint a picture of despair, yet you offer the hope that only care can give.

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  10. “ride waves as tall as troubles”
    Luv this line
    Happy Tuesday

    Much💝love

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  11. I can feel the yearning for connection. We all need it. (K)

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  12. It is so interesting the way eyes connect with another’s soul. Very good poem Mish.

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  13. sounds like a parent trying to protect a child who lost their way … the sea analogy fits. Your words give texture

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  14. Such a wonderful concept that we’re not alone whilst in someone else’s glance.

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  15. ride waves as tall as troubles
    to the brink where waters fall
    you are not alone

    How so wonderful and reassuring to set forth together with a loved one. Great lines Mish!

    Hank

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  16. Takes my breath away, you read the soul so carefully.

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  17. the play on words and punctuations create such depth and impact.

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  18. If each person had a soul determined to reach them like the words in your poem the world would be awakened to love.
    I really liked this poem, especially these lines.
    “we will set sail into the rage

    ride waves as tall as troubles”
    Take good care,
    Ali

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