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I remember your tightwad grin

words sparingly spewed

because you knew…

what?

always something more than I

sly, slithery somethings

hiding in the corner of your lips

now I sip on the memories

of a girl, rootless, wavering

waiting desperately

for her father’s approval

 

 

 

I am hosting the Quadrille prompt this week over at dVerse Poets Pub. Doors open at 3 p.m. E.S.T. You can join in too with your 44 word poem, including the word “sip”.

 

 

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  1. So much in these 44 words. My father’s generation of men, in my perception, were men of few words. That’s conveyed here in the image of this father….but I sense something more negative here because of the words “sly, slithery somethings” ….
    And ah yes….there is something in the need of a daughter for her father’s approval.
    As I said, so much in these 44 words.
    Thanks for hosting today!

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  2. Wow, this has a lot packed in. I feel her desperation for love and attention. What a fool he was, to waste that.

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  3. A girl or any child needs her father’s approval. I hope she finds her roots.

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  4. Tis true, the love of a father is so important to a girl. This is touching.

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  5. This one really resonated with me, brought back some of my own memories.

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  6. Oh, so good – that approval that’s always just out of reach.

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  7. This as dark Mish, with a seasoning of foreboding, and sadness.

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  8. such a deep ache is felt here, ache mixed with other things

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  9. Interesting and deep take on the prompt.

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  10. The ‘tightwad grin’ signalled to me that this was going to be a difficult read, Mish, and the idea that someone always knew something more, so familiar from my childhood, confirmed the story behind this quadrille and I couldn’t stop the tears. I remember ‘sly, slithery somethings / hiding in the corner of [your] lips and that desperate waiting. And we still want to sip on their love and approval, don’t we?

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  11. This is incredibly poignant, Mish and brings back childhood memories for me. I was never the favorite child and had to struggle for love and approval.

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  12. This one touches a nerve and I cant stop reading it. It is touching and beautiful and I feel the sadness in it. 💕

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  13. This is deep and dark. Parents are capable of doing so much damage to their children.

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  14. I like the thought of sipping on memories.

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  15. A poignant read…and so deep too. Love this.

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  16. All I ever had was stepfathers, and mostly I didn’t seek their approva–but that was me. My sister sought approval from stepfather #3, and her reward was that he sexually assaulted her.l

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  17. So much in this to love… to me this speaks of sibling rivalry and lost opportunities to be real friends…the “sly slithery something” speaks volume for me.

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  18. A beautiful and evocative write Mish, I love the idea of sipping on memories 💜

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  19. Fathers Without HeART
    Daddy Problems
    Sipping Love
    Longing
    Longing
    Drinking Soul

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  20. A heart left dry and thirsty…this aches with sadness. We all need roots.

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  21. So much to love here: the sounds, the daughter seeking her father’s approval, tightwad.

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  22. waiting, waiting… or dive in and swim, but still the water is colder wavering. Mish, this is a tremendously honest and piercing quadrille. Oh that we could give the world to each other with both hands and not in little wads, especially to those vulnerables in our charge.

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  23. I suspect that the words that come are not kind. I hope this girl found her roots.

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  24. A heart-breaking piece, but very well written.

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  25. This evokes so much emotion–pain, rejection, perhaps. There are so many dark spaces to be filled in. Much said in few words.

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  26. Oh, and I wanted to note the effective use of alliteration and internal rhyme.

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  27. Thank you so much, Victoria.

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