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Human Equation ~ A Sonnet

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“Where there is righteousness in the heart, there is beauty in the character. When there is beauty in the character, there is harmony in the home. When there is harmony in the home, there is order in the nation. When there is order in the nation, there is peace in the world.”  ~A. P. J. Abdul Kalam ~

 

 

Has God given up on us? Does he weep?

I listen for him in the moon shadows

Dew droplets at dawn, in earth’s gentle sleep

 

Where is the light we were born to embrace?

I sift through the compost of dreams rotted

In darkest alleys, I search for His face

 

Why do we build our own prisons of fear?

Humanity’s keys we hold in our hands

Intentions perish with the silt of tears

 

Do we have the right to ignore our own hearts?

Were they not the gifts of the righteous souls?

Far be it for us to tear them apart

 

Stir gently the pot of evolution

Ignite the flame of a resolution

 

 

Written for a special Poetry Form prompt at dVerse. Bjorn starts us off with some helpful information on sonnets and some exciting news! Doors open at 3 p.m.EST.

  I decided to use the structure of a Terza Rima with 4 tercets and a couplet , but I wandered from the rhyme scheme. Mine is  ABA CDC EFE GHG II.  Oh my, perhaps I shall stick to free verse?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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34 responses »

  1. I really like how you summarized with the last couplet… it helps to conclude and resolve the problem you state in the first 4 tercets. Fear is a strong force that holds us down.

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  2. Well done, Mish, for getting in first with a terza rima. I was toying with the idea of writing a terza rima. I ended up rewriting some free verse into a traditional sonnet and realising that it’s hard enough without making it even more complicated!

    I like the rhythm of your terza rima, as if the speaker is pacing as he or she ponders on those difficult questions, and the way that each stanza is self-contained at the same time as being most definitely part of the whole. Also the pairing of ‘weep’ with ‘ ‘Dew droplets at dawn’ and the contrast of ‘light we were born to embrace’ and ‘compost of dreams rotted In darkest allies’ (should that be ‘alleys’?) are very effective.

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  3. Do we have the right to ignore our own hearts? What a question. I love this meditation, and I’m impressed with the rhyme scheme.

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  4. Love this, Mish….the last two lines are brilliant! JIM

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  5. What a powerful ending!

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  6. the dramatic beginning shocks to alertness then there is a downpouring that flows smoothly to the bang at the end

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  7. Beautiful Mish! There was a haunting nature to this that I enjoyed…

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  8. Nice line and good observation: “Intentions perish with the silt of tears” I also like stirring the pot at the end.

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  9. Why do we build our own prisons of fear….

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  10. I appreciate the wonderful quote and thoughtful questions here. A beautifully styled sonnet, Mish!

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  11. I don’t think you need to stick to free verse at all. This seemed to float effortlessly–questions grounded by your final couplet. Well done, Mish!

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  12. I chose the terza rima too. Nice job. Like Frank, you hooked me with /the silt of tears/. Modern sonnets rule; smile.

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  13. you pose the questions and the form you chose gave us time to ponder them

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  14. Evolution, resolution and revolution are all badly needed. I resonate very much with your poem. I am heartened by the hundrd women recently elected, and hope the womens march on the 19th will send a message – women are rather formidable when we march. Smiles.

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  15. “Intentions perish with the silt of tears”….such an amazing line.
    In a way, it brings to mind the resolution of the Parkland students who told the world, “your thoughts and prayers are not enough.”
    You ask powerful questions here….and in these days of turmoil, applicable questions.
    I’m grateful for your final couplet and, most especially your final line.

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  16. You had me at the powerful opening line Mish. Much to think about and ponder about our relationship with God.

    If you want to rework on the rhyme pattern, I think you still can, smiles.

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  17. I feel the questions are what linger in the readers mind. The world is changing and I am not sure for the better.

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  18. What a power last stanza. Nicely done.

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  19. “Humanity’s keys we hold in our hands

    Intentions perish with the silt of tears”

    This is sadly true. Beautifully written, Mish!

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  20. Nice coupling for the New Year, a very satisfying resolution. Two ways to think about evolution, as a random slow moving force that fixes our nature outside of our control, or something we can stir gently,holding humanity’ Keys in our hands. This is thoughtful and lovely Mish. I love your free verse, but I also love this sonnet.

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  21. Intentions perish with the silt of tears — what a wonderful line and powerful image; I really enjoyed this specific ….

    the deep questions that haunt … and perhaps the only answers come from our stilled hearts and compassionate spirit;

    I think you did just fine with the chosen sonnet form too –

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  22. This is a great image: “I sift through the compost of dreams rotted
    In darkest alleys”. Not only visual but it appeals to the sense of smell. Very powerful. Your call to action at the end is invigorating.

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  23. I thunk a small variation is allowable. Please don’t just stick to free verse; you have handled this form so well.

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  24. I especially like the opening verse, Mish. In this crazy world, these are important musings. You did a superb job with the Terza Rima form!

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