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Enclosed I am

Airless, breathless

Must confess to senseless

Gasping, panting,

Mindless ranting

One… two….breathe

I can’t control

The heart rush

Too much

Tightening, fear frenzy

Heightening

I can’t breathe

Just breathe

I’m boxed in, locked in

With no escape

Now I hyperventilate

 

In response to De’s Quadrille prompt at dVerse Poets Pub. Join in with us at 3 p.m. EST. Write a 44 word poem that must include the word “box”.

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  1. I have slight claustrophobia sometimes, Mish, and I felt this, deeply.
    Love your word/sound choices here, especially:
    “Airless, breathless

    Must confess to senseless”

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  2. I’m breathless just reading your quadrille, Mish. You’ve captured that feeling so well with the short lines, rhymes and repetition..

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  3. Wow – reading this got me feeling downright breathless – very well done!

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  4. I like the sound of “escape” and “hyperventilate” at the end.

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  5. I feel that way when I get an MRI. Your poem is the perfect match to Lillian’s, describing how Jackie feels inside the box with the lid closed.

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  6. Your poem is so visceral and raw. I feel like I’m trapped in a coffin, or underneath the collapsed scaffolding–a variation of taphophobia that I have.

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    • Thank you for the comment, Frank. I’m sorry that you suffer as well. Is that a fear of holes? spelled trypophobia?

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      • It’s a fear of being buried alive. I have a mild case. Usually happens when I walk under scaffolding. I’m irrationally certain it will collapse on me. But there I go, walking under it anyway! πŸ˜†

  7. Being boxed in, I can feel my heart and breathe racing fast! I want to escape….

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  8. You have explained a panic attack very well!

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  9. As a true clastrophobe, I can truly relate!

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  10. I have had a few times of being claustrophobic. It is daunting, to say the least! Nicely put!

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  11. Breathless skill here, left my heart rate up and keen to see the open sky again.

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  12. I can truly feel it! My mother is claustrophobic so this poem really hits home for me.

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  13. The agony is felt through the rhyme and the beat. Amazing!

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  14. A perfect picture of claustrophobia. You captured the feeling of entrapment precisely.

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  15. You have perfectly described a panic attack. I can feel it.

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  16. This is a huge fear for me. The way you formatted this poem was vital in achieving that horrible panicked feeling.

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  17. Just breathe… terrifying. Well crafted.

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  18. A good description of an anxiety attack. I was locked in that box too😊

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