to say I saved you
time has traveled
in dust deviled clouds
and I am not allowed
to speak of it
but here you are
beaming
and I’ve been meaning
to ask you
if you remember
the dark , the muffled glow
of my heart shattered in pieces
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Written for “Poetics: Poems that could save your life”.
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mishunderstood 
oh heartbreaks. nice poem
“Time has traveled in dust-deviled clouds”. I love that turn of phrase!
Maybe it’s time for the savior to be saved, but heartbreakers rarely do that.
Hard when in healing them, you weaken yourself. Then it’s starting over again, isn’t it. I really found resonance in this poem.
Mish, your poem has given me much pleasure this morning. I love the lines:
‘time has traveled
in dust deviled clouds’
and
‘… I’ve been meaning
to ask you
if you remember
the dark , the muffled glow
of my heart shattered in pieces’
has my bottom lip wobbling.
Loved it, Mish!
I myself recently wrote some pieces and I’d love some feedback 🙂
https://hazelvaranocom.wordpress.com/2017/06/08/the-inventor/
https://hazelvaranocom.wordpress.com/2017/06/08/broken-record/
Hazel
“time has traveled in dust deviled clouds” Powerful words and imagery here. Relationships go through these dust clouds….and one partner often remembers them much more clearly.
“Here you are beaming….” and this person seems to have forgotten or is oblivious to the pain caused.
So much in this poem……relationships…..so many kinds of weather to weather!
Ouch, this opens up many wounds… sober and elegant restrained way of writing.
It’s hard to see lovers not as heartbroken as those with broken hearts expect them to be. Nice description of that encounter.
A very moving write about the different realities people experience and the unintentional hurt it can cause 💜
The emotions here sound very complex. It’s almost as if this is being said to a former lover who left and then thrived… much to one’s disappointment. Loved.