Used with Permission: Emily Blincoe
You
cannot fix me.
My voids are custom
made, specially designed
for comfort. Don’t arrange my
faults like feathers in a row,
plucked and sucked dry so
you can take credit
for my flight.
It isn’t
r
i
g
h
t
.
Written for dVerse – “Poetics: Arrangements by Emily Blincoe”
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Love the feather format Mish ~ Opening lines hooked me right away ~ Strong words here, reverberating with right ~
Nicely done with the matching of the shape and the theme. I’m impressed!
LOVE love love the shape of this, and the flow of this:
“Don’t arrange my
faults like feathers in a row”
Great take on the prompt!
Brava-
Bravo Mish! Wonderful strong point. Love the format.
a lovely shape poetry with such strong and fierce message, Mish. ❤
Fabulous! Love the sentiment and the format.
Great to write poetry in such a form… I think it works extremely well for the sentiment of being free and choose to stay.
I love this ❤️ especially “faults like feathers in a row” such a poignant image ❤️
A fantastic feather shape poem, Mish. I love the impact of the phrase ‘plucked and sucked dry’!
Each word carefully weighed and balanced here – a fearsome and fierce, but so understandable response.
The form works so well, and I love your strong message.
Very creative….love the poem resonates with me.
Perfectly clever use of a concrete form.
Clever, strong message, creative–kudos right down the line–and bravo for the finger wagging to those who would /take credit for/my flight/, those parasitic, sarcastic, arrogant piggy-backers who are too damn lazy, or untalented, to do it themselves.
Don’t arrange my thoughts like feathers in a row…yowza! Really excellent indictment of judgmentalism!
Great shape and searing words pointing straight at your accuser.
Love this feather poem! Artful and clever.
Your quill hit the target perfectly!
Clever use of shape poetry. And making “right” vertical instead of horizontal ads to the effect of ‘not being right’
Wow!
Great use of visual form! “faults like feathers in a row” is a particularly strong line.