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There was that one time

When roses did not seem so

Clichรฉd

She opened the guitar case

Lo and behold a dozen

Long stem intentions spoke

To her in petals and posies

Laughing at every thorn

And jagged edge

Nurturing her delusions

Of love

 

Written for our last Quadrille Monday before we take a brief summer break over at dVerse Poets Pub. Bjorn has given us the word “rose” to be used in a 44 word poem, excluding the title. Doors open at 3 p.m. EST.

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  1. love the phrase “a dozen long stem intentions” – a wonderful way of describing not only the flowers, but the meaning behind them too.

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  2. So much shattered when we cannot laugh at thorns any longer… love need so much more than intentions…

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  3. …oh…a dozen long stemmed intentions….and then thorny delusions of love. Oh my — let her keep her smiling thoughts….to be loved in her mind at the very least. Love this quadrille!

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  4. Love the sounds – ‘jagged edge’ set my teeth on edge. Superb!

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  5. Low and behold a dozen Long stem intentions spoke…what a wonderful illusion to the rose. I hope she keeps smiling.

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  6. Oh, we have ruined roses, haven’t we? They are so beautiful and such a cliche. I hope it all works out. It says so much in so few words.

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  7. Poor roses have so much to live up to. I should be careful when I say that I don’t like roses. It’s not the poor flowers I don’t like, but the commercial weight of expectation that has been imposed on the red variety! I did enjoy this.

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  8. Only a true cynical romantic would understand this:

    “Laughing at every thorn
    And jagged edge
    Nurturing her delusions
    Of love” –

    this was great.

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  9. love it! especially your ending 4 lines โค

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  10. I specially love the meaning of roses when given in courtship:

    Long stem intentions spoke-

    True or not, one must look beyond the petals and poises, and see the person underneath.

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  11. If someone shows you his thorns, run…you silly delusional girl! Love this, Mish.

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  12. I love how the ending grabbed me….. and the long stemmed intentions – oh yes!

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  13. Long stem intentions–so clever. Funny how we can fall prey to such seductive devices.

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  14. nurturing her delusions of love!! Love that!!

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  15. Who could resist a guitar case of “long-stemmed intentions”?!

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  16. Love the use of metaphor! Wonderfully done, Mish~ ^^

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  17. Beautiful piece, Mish! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  18. When roses did not seem so Clichรฉd…. perfect!

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  19. In truth, they are all delusions of love! The only thing real lives in the heart! Good one, Mish!

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  20. Hopefully they were “long stem [good] intentions.”

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  21. “Tinted” green — as in jade(ed). Your poet’s voice speaks with the scars of many unspoken betrayals, hurts…? Beautiful.

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  22. In youth, we don’t think those thorns are going to prick us and it’s such a shock when they do! Well done!

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  23. Oh, this line stings, like those thorns:
    “Nurturing her delusions”

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  24. Oh, I love those ‘long stem intentions’ – I wish I’d found some in my guitar case all those years ago!

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  25. Lo and behold a dozen
    Long stem intentions spoke

    it is sad when we look back at our intentions and realize we didn’t follow through or some obstacle prevented the dream from blooming

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  26. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Such a lovely depiction – until that one word, ‘delusions’.

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  27. Your words are so well chosen, every one of them. Thanks.

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