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I remember the green

That took you to lowlands

Con-caved and shallow

Where pools of jealousy

Sat stagnant brooding, breeding

You were like a life-size mosquito

Feeding frantically on bad blood

Spitting out spite, always right

Green grew on you

I didn’t envy you

 

 

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24 responses »

  1. Potent verse. I like the use of green and envy.

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  2. The green-eyed monster is truly a bitter pill… I never envy the envy. Great alternate use of green.

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  3. Wow! This is amazing….and these words especially for me…
    “…pools of jealousy
    Sat stagnant brooding, breeding
    You were like a life-size mosquito
    Feeding frantically on bad blood…”
    You’ve characterized the jealous spiteful person so incredibly well here — just a great comparison to the stagnant pools with the hovering mosquito.

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  4. Another take on the prompt! From happy green to spiteful green. You were like a life-size mosquito….what a wonderful line. And how the poem wraps around it for a new meaning of green.

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  5. Such a powerful metaphor for someone who allows themselves to be consumed by negativity. Not so easy to remain indifferent when dealing with them though. Well done.

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  6. Excellent description of an envious grudge.

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  7. What a great use of the words, you really packed a punch in each line. I love the image of this huge mosquito feeding off gossip and spite.

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  8. This can be an excellent portrayal of a person ~ Negative births negative thoughts, not to be envious at all ~ Well played with the green prompt Mish ~

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  9. Those first three lines are wonderful and really set the scene. They take you into the story.

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  10. Green Bee
    Stings
    JeaLousy
    in own
    oF Love..
    Free Love
    SinGs in i
    oF
    Peace..:)

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  11. Such a strong image. “Spitting out spite, always right” but never happy. We all know that person…

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  12. LOVE the mosquito visual! perfect!

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  13. “Sat stagnant brooding, breeding/ You were like a life-size mosquito/ Feeding frantically on bad blood” I’m amuse with these lines. I like how your words speak in frank. And clever take on green for the prompt.

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  14. Oh I liked this one a lot.

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  15. Oh, yuk! Great! What a mosquito metaphor!

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  16. Envy personified. Wow! Cleverly done.

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  17. The first two lines are perfection.

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  18. A powerful take on the green-eyed monster.

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  19. This is very good. I especially like this line, and that clever hyphen: “Con-caved and shallow”

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  20. Gosh this is good, so direct. Reminds me of plath

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  21. You were like a life-size mosquito
    Feeding frantically on bad blood
    Spitting out spite,

    There are such elements everywhere. One tries to avoid them when they show themselves.
    That is a better alternative than to confront them.One stays above and maintains one’s dignity. Rightly so Mish!

    Hank

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  22. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    An ugly emotion / a vivid poem.

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  23. Those who are green with envy are certainly not to be envied! Great verse!

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