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Fall of Duty

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Out on a limb

Poised and pretty

She is downright gritty

Minutes slip fast

Beyond her grasp

She is stalling on a

Tight rope act

And there’s the twist

She is falling like a

Polished death spiral

Gone viral

Scruples clenched

In both hands

 

 

We are serving up some quadrilles at dVerse Poets Pub! What’s a quadrille? A poem with exactly 44 words and this week,  Grace has asked to include the word “twist”.

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17 responses »

  1. “Scruples clenched

    In both hands” is just a great visual, and metaphor. Love it!

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  2. How you described the fall from the tight rope act so eloquently ~ I specially like:

    She is falling like a

    Polished death spiral

    Thanks for playing along Mish and wishing you a good week ~

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  3. Wow…the title is amazing and then…..that death spiral…scruples clenched….major wow. Glad you have joined the team!

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  4. Oh I love how the last lines really shows a possibility of metaphor instead of the literal skydiving.

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  5. your title and the last two lines give the poem another dimension…..

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  6. This poem has pace – it’s like we’re watching it happen in real time. I love the extended metaphor, especially the final lines: ‘She is falling like a/Polished death spiral/
    Gone viral/Scruples clenched/In both hands.

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  7. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    ‘Scruples clenched / In both hands’ – a striking image.

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  8. Fall of Duty — the tightrope described so tautly in 44 words — and the ending, grasping her scruples – so many levels here. Quite striking indeed.

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  9. I love the wordplay in this, and the excitement.

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  10. I love “scruples clenched…” It’s so descriptive of many of our life leaps.

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  11. Amazing metaphoric write. On a literal level, my hands are sweating–I am height-phobic.

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  12. Great image, great metaphor.

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  13. Wow, this is great, Mish…love those last few short lines, “scruples clenched in both hands”…gave it all another twist entirely!

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  14. Can’t improve on above comments. There’s pain in this.

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  15. Gone viral, scruples clenched in both hands..this made me think of video’s on line that go viral…

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  16. “Scruples clenched in both fists” is such an amazing close for this piece, and I see that I’m not the only one to like it!

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  17. Wow! I felt like I was falling too. Excellent write!

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