Some days I’d like to sail away
On diamond studded oceans blue
A dazzle of my dreams come true
Horizons stretch beyond the bay
Stars for tracing, time erasing
Surrender burdens of yesterday
Life starts with taking breaths anew
Some days I’d like to sail away
Over at dVerse, Victoria C. Slotto has introduced the Octain Refrain, originally created by an English poet by the name of Luke Prater. The rhyme scheme is A-b-b, a-c/c-a, b-a
Eight syllables per line…I may have an extra one.
mishunderstood 
Some days are like that, aren’t they? Although I don’t know if I would want my ocean to be diamond studded. That sounds like some bumpy sailing. 😉
I think that way every day.
haha…reflections are smoother, thank goodness with the same effect 😉
A great visual piece, Mish! One of my favorite inspirations well done!
Thank you, Walt. 🙂
Oh, wouldn’t we all ..especially on a beautiful day as in your pic.
Oh, I would like to sail away too sometimes! Seems like bliss to me.
Would I love to sail away and surrender burdens of yesterday ~ Well done with the form Mish ~
Have a lovely weekend and Happy Easter ~
Thank you. 🙂
Happy Easter to you too, Grace.
Your poem has such a carefree and happy feel about it. It’s lovely to dream of sailing away…or at least getting away somehow!
Thank you…and I agree. 🙂
Absolutely perfect, Mish. If there’s an extra syllable I didn’t notice it. The line with the internal rhyme says it all. Thanks for making the effort!
Thanks so much, Victoria. I really enjoyed it. 🙂
this made smile smile and sigh – such a beautiful dream
Thanks, Candy. 🙂
So ready to go with you! Well done Octain.
Thank you, Ginny. 🙂
Wonderful response to this form. Such a dreamy, happy poem.
“Stars for tracing” …sigh. Yes. Perfect.
Me too! Lovely thought and well done on the form.
Glad you liked it. Thank you. 🙂
Again I read another musical poem perfect to form that had me humming as I read it – Sailing. Wonderful.
Thank you so much, Gay! 🙂
It makes you take a deep satisfying breath. Lovely.
Thanks, Shirley…I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
That’s really beautiful. My step dad was a sailor. It’s an elegant experience, just like your poem!
Thanks. I’m sure it would be an amazing experience. 🙂
And sail we shall.. 😀 beautifully penned!!
Thank you , Sanaa. 🙂
This is beautiful. As a former sailor, this resonates deeply with me.
Your comment means a lot. Thank you!
Love how the final couplet changes this from a desire to travel to a desire to escape.
SMiLes.. give
me three sacred
feet.. as well as feet..
and the air i WiLL
sAil.. as
fREE..:)