Sheltered

Posted on January 19, 2016 by Mish

dance

I danced shadows to shield you
Magnificent steps
Choreographed sweetly
To the beat
Of my breaking heart
You wore my shoes
Heavy with irony
Shuffled down trustworthy trails
Longing to fly barefoot
Across murky dark oceans
Only to dangle your toes
Between shark’s teeth

We are writing quadrilles at Dverse Poets Pub.

22 Comments

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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) | January 19, 2016 at 7:36 pm

I really like your work with metaphors on this.. So rich and telling… The shark teeth are something we tend to be close to.
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- mishunderstood | January 21, 2016 at 12:40 pm
  
  Thanks so much, Bjorn. I really appreciate your opinion.
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whimsygizmo | January 19, 2016 at 10:33 pm

NICE. Step carefully, yes?
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Grace | January 20, 2016 at 12:54 am

Yikes on the ending ~ You made dancing here a great metaphor for sharky-filled relationships ~

Thanks for joining us for our first Quadrille !
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- mishunderstood | January 21, 2016 at 12:46 pm
  
  Had to laugh at “sharky-filled relationships”. Thanks Grace. 🙂
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  - Grace | January 21, 2016 at 5:19 pm
    
    Hi Mis,
    
    Can you please email me at: sometimesg@yahoo.com ?
    
    Thanks 🙂
katiemiafrederick | January 20, 2016 at 2:34 am

Dancing childhood dreams
of parents and friends
for greater escape
from predators
aGaiNst prey..
praying for
another
way oF
hope
for
more oh faith
Believes iN Miracles
away from jaws of fear
escaping danger
iN the nick
of doubt
where
hope
leaves..
fAll..
riSe..:)
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- mishunderstood | January 21, 2016 at 12:44 pm
  
  Interesting response, as always, katie. Thank you.
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http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com | January 20, 2016 at 6:38 am

Dancing dangerously!
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- mishunderstood | January 21, 2016 at 12:45 pm
  
  Yes, sometimes we do…but it can make life a little interesting.
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Mary | January 20, 2016 at 7:18 pm

Some wonderful metaphors here! Definitely a well ‘choreographed’ write!
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- mishunderstood | January 21, 2016 at 12:45 pm
  
  What a sweet comment. Thanks so much. 🙂
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Waltermarks | January 21, 2016 at 1:36 pm

We dance through the minefields, (or sharksteeth) in someone else’s grace, carelessly disregarding the hazards of life. Thank God and the other who shields us from becoming truly foolloosened
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- mishunderstood | January 22, 2016 at 4:38 am
  
  This can be true…but sometimes a shield can be too big. Thanks for your comments!
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Tara R. | January 21, 2016 at 3:12 pm

So much emotion in these words. Beautiful turn of a phrase.. “Magnificent steps / Choreographed sweetly / To the beat / Of my breaking heart”
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- mishunderstood | January 22, 2016 at 4:38 am
  
  Thank you, Tara. 🙂
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vbholmes | January 21, 2016 at 10:18 pm

Wonderful imagery, telling words. Lovely poem.
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- mishunderstood | January 22, 2016 at 4:39 am
  
  I appreciate your comments, thank you! 🙂
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Bryan Ens | January 23, 2016 at 4:30 am

A bit abstract, and entirely lovely. Love how you “danced shadows”.
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- mishunderstood | January 23, 2016 at 5:19 pm
  
  Thank you, Bryan! 🙂
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Bodhirose | January 23, 2016 at 6:42 pm

As a parent, it can be treacherous to keep those little toes safe from “shark’s teeth.” Wonderful!
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- mishunderstood | January 24, 2016 at 7:40 pm
  
  True….and sometimes we try too hard. Thanks for your comment. 🙂
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